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Failure's So-Called Sting by ~embraceimperfections:iconembraceimperfections:



Sing of all my broken dreams
And all I could have done and been
Sing of all those wasted chances
And the people I won’t prove wrong

But you need
30 more years
Of bitterness and disappointment before you can be talking like that my girl
Yes you need
30 more years
Of being less than you can be before you can really
Complain
And you need
30 odd years
Of dying inside every time you think “I should have”
Yes you need
30 more years
Of getting up in the morning and knowing that life goes on

Sing of all the times I tried,
And fell, my face down in the mud
Again, againm feel failure’s sting
Like endless stab wounds to the heart

But you need
30 more years
Of bitterness and disappointment before you can be talking like that my girl
Yes you need
30 more years
Of being less than you can be before you can really
Complain
And you need
30 odd years
Of dying inside every time you think “I should have”
Yes you need
30 more years
Of getting up in the morning and knowing that life goes on

Through this failure I discover
I may have lost one self but I have found another
Despite the wounds my heart remains
Intact
And it has found its voice

Everything I’ve been and am all comes together in this writing hand

All the pieces fit together
And I know that nothing can ever
Take this from me

So

Sing of all my broken dreams
And all I could have done and been
Sing of all the wasted chances
And the people I won’t prove wrong

Sing of shame, then recantation
Sing of loss, reconciliation
Sing, sing, sing, sing
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Author's Comments

Last summer I was sitting in the moonlight in a Cafe in Rome, waiting with my Dad for our friends to come and pick us up. Because I'm normal I was singing to myself (mostly the Welsh folk song "Dafydd y Gareg Wen") and thinking about the subjects raised in this song. And the first stanza of the song just popped into my head. Tune and all (although admittedly it does bear a resembelance to "Dafydd y Gareg Wen"). That never happens to me. Generally any piece of creativity I produce involves sweat, blood, alot of swearing and moodiness and banging my head against the wall. But during the last four months everything in this song has just come to me during my singing to myself and thinking sessions (I am so normal). Generally when I'm walking the dog. 90% of my inspiration seems to come to me while walking. All this time without any effort this song has grown up until the day before yesterday I realised that I had a full song I could sing start to finished and so commited it to writing for the first time. I am currently in the process of writing an accompaniment for it (on harp naturally) and hopefully in the not too distant future I will record it and share the finished version with you all.
And yes I know the last line sounds a bit weird. It sounds alot better with music.

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ah, julia, you little musical genius, you. (were there too many commas in that sentence?)
I ought to write a song.... I haven't done so in quite some time. (although I have about six half-finished poems)
I like this. (more on topic now) it makes me feel much more optimistic!!!

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~OTP~
:iconschattenblum:
Is that the Welsh hyme you sung to me, that you were going to perform?
Either way, this is amazing - and let's face it; no-one, especially no kind of artist, is normal (who wants to be?). If we were, we would probably have very real, terrible limits in our inspiration and portrayal!
Singing really is the best way to process feelings verbally, I think - especially if nostalgia and hopes are combined. I got the impression that it could be a song sung by a teenage girls' mother who is looking back on her own experiences - both those done and chances not taken - effectivley saying to her child "don't look down on me as an incomprehensive parent who doesn't understand, 'cos I've seen more of life than you". I may be totally off-topic, but that's what came to me.
Anyway, I love it.

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Strength to thy soul and wind to thy wings.

Sunlight to walk in,
moonlight to dance in,
starry skies to gaze upon.
:iconembraceimperfections:
Yes that is too many commas my love. You should indeed write a song, I liked your composition "Worlds apart" and the tune you wrote for "OK". I'm glad it made you feel optimistic, it certainly gave me a lift and I hope will continue to do so.

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Everything I've been and am all comes together in this writing hand...
:iconembraceimperfections:
I though "hymn" was spelt like that.
What is "normal" anyway?
Your interpretation is close, but not quite, what I orginally intended but has the right feelings and themes about it. I'm glad that you have this interpretation and choose to share it with me. Thankyou.

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Everything I've been and am all comes together in this writing hand...
:icondead-starfish:
=D
yay uplifting...ness.
(I am none too coherent today)

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~OTP~
:iconyneis:
Happy New Year! I would just like to add that I agree with Amy in her immediate interpretation of it.
Lovely as always 'Ulia.

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When life gives you lemons, throw them at the non believers.

"Slugs are just snails that have been mugged by other snails."
:iconschattenblum:
Oh blast... I'm never sure with that word. Both work really, as both ending letters are silent!
Glad I was close and you liked the theory... I'll have to dig my brain a bit more.

--
Strength to thy soul and wind to thy wings.

Sunlight to walk in,
moonlight to dance in,
starry skies to gaze upon.
:iconembraceimperfections:
Thankyou! It's a good immediate interpretation.

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Everything I've been and am all comes together in this writing hand...
:iconyneis:
Hurrah for immediate interpretations - the kind of interpretations busy people use. ^ ^

--
When life gives you lemons, throw them at the non believers.

"Slugs are just snails that have been mugged by other snails."

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